Sela Locke

Huh, strange and, well, interesting. You need to work on making it a little more informative. You described Harvey, but I didn't find out what Sasha looks like. I don't ...

Nitpicking really isn't my thing, so I won't do any. Anyhow, this story is definitely going to take some work. My biggest peeves? Well, for one, this is another one ...

Unless this story was placed somewhere in the, I don't know, fifteen hundreds, I suggest you throw out pretty much all of the dialogue. Normal teens don't say things like... ...

Okay, I'm not going to nitpick. Most of this was pretty good, considering the cliche of Leo's looks. The plotline is exciting, and certainly got me excited as she raced ...

Faded Fear; Chapter Two. If it was merely a question of impatience, Carly would've been happy to lose him, right there at the entrance of the flea-bag motel. However, he ...

I don't have a whole lot to say, and the reviewers above got most of the nitpicks, so really I just have a question... Have you read Twilight? Because this ...

Dude, Nu, this's insanity. With capital I and a capital SANITY. Okay, copying off of Will Ferrel, now. But anyways, yeah. One thing I noticed, (no matter how insignificant compared ...

Dude, peeps, you guys aren't ugly! I'd post some of my own silly pics, but dunno how yet. Just don't beat yourselves up! -hugs- -SELA

I'm not looking for nitpicks, but opinions on the 'big picture'. Have fun reading! ^^ ---- I had managed to get through the enormity of the day without incident, thankfully. ...

I have read every single one of these chapters and I have to admit you are a fairly good writer. You have nice imagery, and you are descriptive. But I ...

I honestly don't know why everyone is going on and on about how good it is. No, the plot is good, the idea is good, but -- there's so little ...

I might not put any more on. Not sure, to be honest. I finally folded under Chern's constant pelting about it. (Sorry Chernobyl, bit of an exaggeration. ^_^; ) - ...

I don't usually hold pencil or pen right, so my hand gets cramped easily. I feel silly repeating it, since others have said so too, but I only write with ...

There's nothing wrong with making the prologue - or preface - mysterious and flabbergasting. You have time to explain later. Also to describe the narrator - later. But do remember ...

I think Always got most of the nitpicks, so I'll just stick to the overall style... You switch from past to present tense, and back, a lot. It's bad grammar, ...